Wow Dean, on first read all I can say is that the story is mich more believable. I will give it more attention later and see if I find anything else that I want to comment on.
I shall await that flail you call a pen, cruel sir!
Wow, talk about over acting! This is what happens when I start reading Sophoclese.
I meant to say that I'm looking forward to seeing what you think.
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