Getting back at Mean Dean

[tessa]

~shields my eyes from the blazing inferno of erotica that is Mr. Dean's story...points one still shaky (and very tired) finger over in the direction of his chapters~

I think (barely) that there's a comma or something missing over there.

~glances over towards the area of the epilogue and feels the hypnotic power of the story sucking me back in...hurriedly covers eyes in an attempt to stay focused...speaks in a breathless whisper~

Maybe.

~imagines the mermaid fountain and feels that thought go straight down, umm...there~

[H Dean]

Yeah, you're right. I need to get to editing the story. Probably next week I'll get to that.

[H Dean]

Well, I got to editing the first chapter a little sooner than I planned. Immediately after my edits I submitted the story to the library for publication. Unfortunately, immediately afterwards, I realized that my edit needed a bit of editing. I am going to try to edit it and resubmit the first chapter. I am hopeful I can manage the edit before the story goes public. If not, I may leave it as is.

My main purpose for this exercise was multi-pronged. First, it was to give all the students something to dismember. I was hopeful that it would help your own work.

Another reason was to show you the work of a Writer's Block instructor. I wanted you to see how early drafts look, so you can see that your stories, before multiple edits, look just like ours (at least mine).

I also wanted to boost your confidence. If you can see that your stories are no less in need of edits than mine, maybe you will have the confidence to tackle something larger than the brief pieces you post here. Also, if you could see the help you can give to others, you can see how well you can edit your own stories.

That being said, I wanted to offer you all my thanks. What was intended as a help to you all turned out as a help to me. Not only did you aid my editing of the story but you may have caught a few things I might not have caught. So, thank you all for your efforts. You made my story that much better.

Rhabbi, I see that you managed to put up a few tales in the library. I intend to get to reviewing your tales very soon. I may even begin reading them tonight.

The rest of you who have managed to get beyond level 2 need get your asses in gear and start writing something substancial. I know you can do it. I have seen your work. It's good. I am a harsh critic and I wouldn't say this if I didn't believe it to be true.

Now get to work!

[tessa]

Food for thought, Mr. Dean. A eight-course meal in fact.

My thanks for your excellent example.

tessa

ps. Nice directive there at the end...made me tingle all over.