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Alex was hurt and angry; only Miranda could irritate him to this point. He was amazed he was even still conversing with this smartass.

"Get away from that cyber crap," his friend, Sue, had (delete) told him, "you deserve better than that."

And (delete)she was right, and Alex knew it. It was becoming (delete) obvious that a long-distance Dom had no chance against a smartass sub, who was more into playing mindgames (two words) than actually submitting.

She needed to be physically put over one knee and spanked mercilessly, but she was just too far away. (change to a semicolon)And she took full advantage of that.

So, Alex knew that this wasn't going to work. And (delete) he knew he shouldn't even be trying.

It had started innocently enough, on one of those alternative dating sites. "Control my mind, and my body will follow," read her ad. If all went well, she lived about two hours' drive away. Not too bad.

Alex had a pretty (either delete or change to a more formal sounding word.) high regard for his own chat skills -- hadn't he brought two other women (and Sue, his friend) to creamy orgasms over Instant Messaging? He could do this.

Miranda had other plans, though. They'd chatted nicely for a while, exchanged a few mails, and he'd even made her come, for real, in yet another improvised cybersex scene.

After that, Alex had realized he might have been verbally fondling a 55-year-old truck driver named Sid, for all he knew. Feeling a bit taken advantage of, he'd asked to see her picture, and she had laid out the bait.

"I'll webcam for you, how's that? I feel really close to you after our little session, and I would love to show you more of me."

How could he refuse such an offer? "Absolutely, turn it on."

"Not tonight," she continued, "It's late and I have to work tomorrow morning. How about tomorrow at 11pm (i would change this to "tomorrow night at 11"?"

A bit frustrated, but game, Alex had (delete) agreed. He'd actually been unable to get the upcoming cam session off his mind the entire next (delete) day, and had hurried home from the theatre to be on time.

At 10:55 he had turned on his instant messenger and waited. At 11:00 he'd buzzed her, and seen (just a personal preference, but i would have used "received") no reply. As (delete) he'd turned his attention to other friends online, other hobbies, other work, (semicolon) he had checked back occasionally to see if Miranda had signed on.

Just as he'd been about to go to bed, at 2:10am (maybe try "a little after two", she had popped up. She mentioned casually that she'd been working late. No apology, no remorse. And she was now happy to chat, but "too tired" to turn on her webcam.

He asked her politely to do so anyway, and got a flat "no". She suggested 11pm the next day, and signed off without apology.


...to be continued?

Nice work, i'll get your next assignment up soon.

rose