Nice story. I especially like the evil man, binding his girl in her sleep, this is so sinister and sexy. I am not much of a nit picker, but I see what you were trying to get at with the sentence about her being a good sleeper. His commenting about her being a good sleeper shows his sense of humor. Tone is sarcastic yet affectionate? Did I get that right?

Originally Posted by moptop
I woke up early that morning. I always wake up before my slut – she’s good at many things, and one of the ones she’s best at is sleeping. You could set off a small nuclear explosion next to her and she wouldn’t notice.

-she's good at many things, when it comes to sleeping, she's the best.

You seem to be able to see lots of little things you want to change, to many of the same word is pretty easy to fix...were you not allowed to edit?

I liked this, it was sexy and fun.

Beswitchingly