Hi BP, Moptop and others,

There is no need to wait for me.
Jump right in and give your feedback.

BP, I certainly don't mind.

Moptop, I'm hoping to spend some time with this today.

For those reading Moptop's story, please answer the following:

1. Do you believe this story is told by a man? Why or why not? What's missing? What works for you?

2. How's she doing on the active tense?

3. Are the actions in the story believable?

Please review and write on!

Ruby