For those reading Moptop's story, please answer the following:

1. Do you believe this story is told by a man? Why or why not? What's missing? What works for you?

I was suddenly taken by a sight that made my balls start crawling and my cock start twitching.
I believed it was a man. As far as I know strap-ons don't "twitch".

2. How's she doing on the active tense?

umm...forgot what that means...will get back to you.

3. Are the actions in the story believable?

oh goodness i hope so...that was delicious.

Please review and write on!
Seriously, yes. I did believe the scenario possible. Gentle, quiet movements on a very heavy sleeper. A "What the fu..." after she realized it was her Master, I thought that was funny.

Slight detour on reality for me was: What about the just-woke-up-need to use the bathroom right away reality? Excuse the graphic/practical thoughts...it's what occurred to me.

I guess it's obvious I enjoyed the story. It wasn't awkward to read, very pleasant. Flowed well.