Quote Originally Posted by cariad View Post
*fans self*

Then remembers I am supposed to be critical too. A great first start to the writers' block Raxor - well done.

I would niggle over



Unless she is a girl who has spent too much time reading BDSM literature I don't think she is likely to have those thoughts - if she was, then her reactions would have been different.

When is part 2 coming?????

cariad
I agree, the conclusion is implausible. Part two may or may not be coming; there are other stories I want to finish first, as well as keep up with whatever assignments I am given.

Oh, and I now realize that italics do not carry over when pasting from Word to message box. I guess I will have to go through and re-italicize some sentences.