Restless Demon

[Ruby]

BP wrote: I only wrote in first person for years, it was something I was trying to get away from. Writing from the male point of view doesn't feel honest to me...I also realise it is important to be able to do so effectively, if I ever want any of my male characters to think or speak.

That makes lots of sense. We can certainly focus on stretching your "third person" writing skills.

I would like to make this third person, and I could set him up to tell the story (he is mad) and it would be much easier not to cheat you all with a vague notion of where he is telling the story from and make it more believable...however I did like the surreal aspect of it...I will have to think on this, perhaps I can do both.

Go for it! Take this piece where you'd like or be done with it and tackle something new.

If you'd like to work on this tale a bit more, then define the parameters of what you want to accomplish before you begin and then put the next version in this thread.

For example: The next version will be told in third person, from the leading man's point of view, (versus the omnipresent narrator), using active tense for the action wherever possible.

BP, thank you for your willingness to try new things.

Write on!

Ruby

[Satan_Klaus]

Satan_Klaus,
Feel free to drop your pants, bend over and lay across my knees.
You deserve a good "reward" spanking for putting a huge smile on my face.

Anytime, Ruby.

By the way: Did my email get lost in cyberspace or do YOU need a little spanking for tardiness?

Satan_Klaus

[Ruby]

Anytime, Ruby.

By the way: Did my email get lost in cyberspace or do YOU need a little spanking for tardiness?

Satan_Klaus

Satan_Klaus, you make me laugh, thank you. My tardy response to your e-mail was being written before you posted this and I didn't see it until after I'd hit the send button.

If you want to switch and take turns receiving a fun spanking, I'm all for it. Shall we set a date for November? Until then, I only have time to do the spanking.

Ruby