I have just arrived at the Block, and have started looking around to see how things work here. This is the first completed assignment that I have read, and I am impressed. The story is gripping, and I could just feel the desert ambiance. The tension built steadily, and the sudden twist at the end left me longing for the next chapter. It was not clear to me, however, why she lost consciousness. If it was the flash, how did that work? If it was the beer, she should have felt woozy before the photo. As others have pointed out, I was also a little distracted by the tense changes, but it is a superb story.

I was also impressed by the quality of the criticism offered. It is difficult to get good, constructive criticism like this story received.

nancy