Nancy, this site actually uses BBCode, not HTML. they are similar, but not the same.

As for your story, there are still a few things that need improvement.

I am going to focus in on one paragraph, the second. I am picking this paragraph because it actually has some of the worst problems all gathered into it, and it should be setting the pace and tone of the rest of your story.

Lisa woke up slowly, feeling groggy and disoriented. Her head throbbed and she was thirsty. When she reached for the glass of water she kept on her bedside table, her arm wouldn’t move. She struggled and felt the rope around her wrist press into her skin. She opened her eyes and saw only black, and felt the pads of a blindfold on her eyes. Trying not to panic, she felt ropes press into her wrists and ankles as she tried to move her arms and legs. She realized that she was tied to a bed, on her back, with arms and legs spread wide. She remembered being grabbed and the sting on her buttocks. Lisa struggled against the intractable bonds with panic twisting her stomach into a knot.

Of the 8 sentences in this paragraph, 5 start with she, and 2 with Lisa. We already know the story is about her, and this detracts from my reading of the story. The pace is choppy and never gets going. You should try to build through the paragraph to a climax in the last sentence.

Here is how I rewrote it. This is bt no means the only way, or even the best. It is just what I came up with after reading your story and thinking for a bit.

Lisa woke feeling groggy and disoriented. Thirst and a throbbing head battled for her attention. Reaching for the glass of water at her bedside she felt a jerk at her wrist. She opened her eyes, saw only darkness, and began to struggle. Struggling not to panice she soon relaized that there were ropes around her wrists and ankles. Then she recalled being grabbed, and the sting in her buttocks. Panic set in and she futilely struggled agains her bonds.

This actually conveys all the information of the way you wrote it, but it also sets a pace and tone that will make your story more exciting. By starting it fast, and then slowing it down, you can make the reader feel what Lisa is feeling.

This story, and you as a writer, have a lot of potential. Attention to detail will carry you through this to the end. Not just the mechanics of writing, but what you want the reader to experience. you will never be able to get to everyone, but if you can get to a few you will make an impression they will never forget, and what else can a writer ask for?

Edit:

I did not realize that this was someone else's story, but I am going to leave my posts so that everyone can see what I see wrong with this story. As Nancy rewrote it top read the way she did, I feel that I can still point what is wrong with her rewrite.