Wow nancy, not only are you one of the fastest working students to go through the level, but you are one of the best too!

I really liked your chapter from Steve's POV. It kept with the original feel of the story and with his character. I know I wanted him to be a rounded character, with some feelings still under the surface.

Just a simple nitpick, but I would change the order of the last part of this sentence from. The first four days consisted of lectures covering the psychology and techniques of dominance along with practice in using on dummies a plethora of implements for control and torment. to The first four days consisted of lectures covering the psychology and techniques of dominance along with practice in using a plethora of implements for control and torment on dummies.

I also feel some commas are needed in this sentence, though it is just a personal change. I also wonder if with should be changed to on.

The final three days were engaged in practicing with supervision all that had been learned with three trained female slaves. to The final three days were engaged in practicing, with supervision, all that had been learned on three trained female slaves.


I do agree with you about the kidnap, it was just too easy. You teased me with a rewrite of the kidnap! Hmm now I have to decide whether to let you go up to level 3 or make you do the rewrite LOL

Seriously nancy, it is up to you. I feel you are ready for level 3 and would get you entry if you want to move up now. However if you have ideas about the kidnap and would like to have a go at it, then I would love to see it.

H Dean is also away for a few days and I am sure he would love to see your level 2 progress before you move on. However, he will be sure to still review your work whether you are still in level 2 or moved up to level 3.

Thanks again for all your hard work, it is much appreciated. I look forward to hearing what you wish to do.

AG