tessa's second assignment - The Waiting

[Ruby]

Hi Tessa,

Thank you for posting this so quickly!

I added a copyright and changed the title of the thread to add the title of your horror, (dare I say?), gorror story.

I'll stand back and wait on this version until the others have chimed in.

Keep up the great work and write on!


All,

Please have a look and provide some constructive feedback.

What worked for you?

What didn't?

Is there anything you would change to make it better?

What impressions did the story leave you with?

For those of you compelled to provide grammar suggestions, go for it!

Ruby

[tessa]

Thanks for the copyright, Ms. Ruby. Do I need to do that from now on? Just have never thought about it, so I wondered.

You have already provided so much for this story. Thank you for that as well.