I don't nit-pick. Rose is perfection herself at that, so I don't dare. I will say that this story is fabulous! (the first one, although I appreciate the humor of the senond one ) I love the intricacies and the twists and turns. And the suffering of Jessie is scintillatingly erotic. Loved that!

Maybe you would think about getting this one "whipped" as you said, add a bit more to the ending to close it all up (as in just how "good" a girl Jessie is going to have to be for Nick...yum!) and consider posting it in the Library for our story readers to enjoy? They would most definitely enjoy it all up.

Really excellent, Austerus.

tessa