I'm thinking that we should all be careful what we wish for. Hmmmm.....

Yes, naughty girl me, was checking in to catch up on PMs and a few housekeeping items before taking out the red pen and seeing what you've come up with while I've been away.

Mishka,

You make the dialog flow so easily between these two ladies. Reading your writing is a pleasure, as there are so few spelling or grammar mistakes, mostly editing choices that could be made.

For example, if I went through this with my red pen, I'd mark all the places where a comma could have been used.

There are also some interesting choices made to break up the dialog with descriptions.

When you are writing, do you think about these choice or just go for it?

Looking back at it again, what choices do you think you'd make differently for a quick editing refresh?

Interested in your thoughts,

Ruby