Quote Originally Posted by rach View Post
Pain riveted through Paula's head like a dozen hyperactive woodpeckers; she always hated herself when she drank too much.
Absolutely love this!!! So image rich I can feel it. No, I haven't been drinking.


“Hello Paula, its Marcus. I hope you don’t mind me ringing you. Beth gave me your number. I’d love to see you again. My number is…..”
I do enjoy a happy ending.

Perhaps, just maybe if you want to? Use paragraph breaks a bit more frequently? It helps with the flow of reading.

Really nice one.

tessa