Hi Razor,
I've read over your "Bad Endings" series as well as some of the reviews.
First you need to realize that not all reviewers are kind but you can still learn from them. The most common complaints were too short, too simple. I'd say they are being a bit picky but they are the audience so we have to give it some credence.
In general I think you write event/plot based stories. These will always be simpler and shorter than character based stories. You'll notice that the assignment I gave you was about characters and not so much about the events.
You may have had a little difficulty with it but you ended up getting into the characters heads; and more importantly dragging the reader in with you.
In general this kind of story telling is more complex and nuanced. Sort of the difference between a Tom Clancy Novel and a Steven King Series. Finding the proper balance between the two methods is important. There is a thread of short stories on the forum that shows you can get inside your characters head without being too long winded,
http://www.bdsmlibrary.com/forums/showthread.php?t=3173
Sooo...
Pick one of those bad endings, The one you dislike the most. Let me know which one you choose and let's see what we can do with it OK.
Mad Lews