Not bad Razor,
There are a few technical glitches but not many, I'll go over them if you want. The story is interesting and rather complete, which is something you've improved at. I'd wonder what the difference is between a subby male, and a male acting submissive? Is it only a question of circumstance or does attitude play a larger role. In any event this is a story with a very real feel to it.
Ya done good.

Mad