you all are seeing exactly what a writer should try to do

1 Try to make the reader feel that they are there--thru detail decriptions

2 Make it real--- as close to real life as possible --unless it is Sifi

3 Using proper grammar and spelling

4 Do not force the story ---let it flow

5 Most important ---be satisfied with the story yourself before publishing it

these are some of the most basic rules of writing-- there are others and we will see them as we continue to look at stories here