Originally posted by Marcus

OK, here's my explanation, which might make more sense. Hope you don't mind it appearing in the forum. Maybe 'attention to detail' was not the best way of putting it. It's more that I felt the dialogue raced along without giving a reader, or at least me (a slow-medium reader), the chance to absorb the details of the story. I've read chapters 2 & 3 and am enjoying your writing but the same still applies, my mind is probably runs a bit slower than yours
I don't mind talking about here at all, I thought that this is what this particular forum was for.

And you know, you are right! In thinking back to how the story evolved between my husband and myself, I knew that I wanted to get to the 'meat' of it quickly, but had to set the scene. Setting the scene is hard for me to do, yet, I like to give clues in the process and so can't rightly skip it.

On the one hand, I don't want to reveal what is really happening at Yawla just yet, I want people to wonder if Dr. Wingate and her husband Dr. Jones are really evil, or just innocent scientists doing their thing ... with perhaps Trinity corrupting them. *grin*

I'm running into a timing issue I think. I often write too slow, or too fast. I'm having a tough time finding a good middle ground that works for the pace of the story. In some ways, I want to jump right to the meat of it, but there is such a psychological factor I don't want to overlook. LOL!

Thanks! I know I don't want it to rush along as I myself like to savor the experiences, especially when they are so appealing to me personally.

That's excellent feedback and I appreciate it!

Time to go read chapter four and check the pacing of it before I post it!

Pooka