Thanks for letting me read your story, CB. My take is a little different from the others, just because there's no need to repeat the good advice you have received.

Something else to consider is your point of view. First person, though it falls neatly to hand when you begin to write, is actually a difficult pov to handle -- in first person, the speaker can only say what s/he actually experiences, thinks, or imagines. And, as the previous posters have pointed out, the more senses (i.e., experiences) you include, the better for the reader's experience.

Imo, your story might work better in "third person, limited" pov, or "limited omniscient" (same thing, two terms). In it a third person narrator, wiser, calmer and more on top of things than the narrator (for whatever reason) actually tells the story but LIMITS him/her self to the emotional pov of the character. In this way, you can tell a story sympathetic to Hitler's experience, or Jack the Ripper's, or a retarded child's, or anyone for that matter.

In that way, your narrator can make transitions that would escape the emotional radar of your main character.

Just a thought. I hope it helps.