Not bad Slut. Your descriptions were pretty good, although I would have liked some more of the senses portrayed. And here:

As soon as I open the door the smoke filled hall makes me gag and gasp for break. My neighbor Alex pushes me to the floor and tells me to stay low. We crawl to the end of the smoke filled all trying to make it to the window.
Smoke filled hall is a good description once, but I think it's a bit of an overkill to have the same phrase twice that close together. Next time maybe you could try to find a different descriptive phrase if you want to talk about the same thing that close together.

I think you did a fine job and I'll be sending you your next assignment soon. I do get busy, so if it doesn't show up in a couple of days be patient, it'll get there.