I don't know what any of the characters look like really. Is Joey big? Is Lisa a red-head? Now mystery is a big part of erotic writing, but taken too far it can be discouraging for the reader.
Hummmm now didn't I hear this before? Hummm oh yes it was my mother/editor when she was reading a vanilla piece I wrote. Thought I'd stopped that. Giggle Thank you for the relevant criticism.