Shwenn, this continues to be a good and interesting story. I did enjoy this chapter, but perhaps not as much as I could have or should have. I think perhaps this is why:

The dialog is very good, however particularly in the first half of this chapter, much of the narration feels like an outline or draft that you intended to flesh out later, but never did.

Look at the first paragraph here, and then compare it with that of the first paragraph in your first chapter. The beginning of your story opens with rich descriptions of her sharp nails, the folds of fabric of her dress—things that intrigue and make a reader want to read on. This second chapter’s opening paragraph is just simply not as strong or descriptive.

Take care to grab every opportunity to titillate your reader. “The maiden began putting the salve on his testicles. Tink, tink, tink. His legs twitched..” this is really is kind of flat and uninteresting to read and especially when you stop and consider how fucking red hot it would be in reality. “She stood and remove her clothes..”, “She guided him inside her and lowered onto him.” Again, these are missed opportunities. Remember, little perverts like me really appreciate details.

The second paragraph, you’ve used the word “basket” four times in a many lines. (And twice in the short paragraph before that) Repeating words too closely can quickly bog a story down and make it feel very repetitive—because it is.

Ok, I know it must seem like I’m really knocking the stuffing out of your writing here. I did enjoy this chapter, but just not as much as the first. And, I wouldn’t be responding to this post if I didn’t think it was worth while. So, keep it up..*gg* the story that is because I'm looking forward to reading more.