i found this a very interesting, very graphic story and wondered on several occacions what i might feel like (not the physical sensations but inside my head) if i were in her situation...

would it be possible for you to write a bit from the slave's perspective? i should think her mind is absolutely racing - in a turmoil because she's been subjected to so much hurt and humiliation yet she's drawn to it and has been gratified by it too (maybe she's slightly horrified by her reactions and eagerness to be in such a submissive position). unless she has been brought to life like soem kind of sexual robot, she will have very clear ideas of what "good" is...and what is "bad". in the story she is being systematically reduced to a sexual animal - she might be secretly excited by this but also secretly ashamed of her desires (i don't know about men but for us females there's a huge load of moral stuff that implies we are either "pure" or "wicked" with no middle ground). perhaps your female character is trying to make sense of what's been happening to her.

its your story and your perspective that makes it unique, but i thank you for making me think about this girl - perhaps she keeps a diary about her experiences?

love

ruthie[Phil]

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