I too thought the pace of the story was too quick. There needed to be just a little more description. I have read stories by C before and this one is his standard formula. Catching magical virginal creatures, they get deflowered and then killed.

http://www.bdsmlibrary.com/stories/s...p?storyid=4643 was his latest offering and I think he did a much better job of expanding the plot and background while also varying slightly from his normal story line. I still had some questions about the characters motivations but all in all his writing is always improving.