I suspect no one has posted on this thread as they were reluctant to criticise someone who's just trying to entertain.
Seriously, I thought it was awful what I read. I managed the first page or two then skipped ahead. I couldn't read more than 3 or 4 pages.
It's the kind of topic I could maybe get into, but the way it was written was very poor.
Why did it get so much attention? Maybe the subject material & the story codes??
Tojo