HI Guys

I have been working on and off on my story for far too long now. I have completely reformatted and edited the whole thing as it currently appears. BUT I hame not sure of exactly the best method to format a conversation that includes actions and incidental statments.

Below is a chunk of the current revision (it contains nothing bad). As you can see I have well and truly screwed the pooch.
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   Mr Evans walks into the prefect meeting red-faced, and wheezing. Mr M and 
the new school prefects all turn to look at him. They are both; annoyed at 
being distracted from watching the change rooms, and amused that he has 
had to actually break a sweat today.
          “Those girls you sent me…. *Pant* are an energetic couple of                                                             
          cunts….*pant* Too much energy for their own good.” He slumps on his
          chair exhausted.
          “So what you’re saying.” Mr M looks at him. “Is that you worked them           
          hard like I asked?”
          “Yes. Those bitches wouldn’t stop talking and laughing… like they
          don’t have a care in the world. No matter how many God-Damm times
          I ran them around the field. I made them sprint 30 times from goal to 
          goal. Even had them do 200 sits-ups as fast as they could. They just
          kept coming back for more, even laughing! Like it was some stupid 
          game, don’t get me wrong it’s not like I ran with them, but I can
          only yell at them to run faster so much before it starts to hurt.
          I had to walk up and down the field, so I didn’t have to yell so much.”
          “But did you break them in?”
    Mr M doesn’t turn away from the two-way mirror; he is wondering where his
star pupils are.
          “They are sprinting 15 more laps around the oval… they were looking
          pretty haggard by the time I left to join you. One thing is for sure;
          after today, their endurance must have increased ten-fold. I didn’t         
          become a champion soccer coach without knowing how to make a 
          body work beyond its limits.”
    On cue; the door to the change room limps open, as two very sorry looking 
waifs tumble in. They are holding each other up for balance, but Mr M is happy
to see that despite having been pushed to their limits; the spark is still
in their eyes. He leans back, and lights a Cuban, he watches the scene unfold
on the other side of the glass. 
    The girls slump on the benches wheezing, and gasping for breath to fill
their tiny lungs. Having to look at each other’s pain just hurts more. 
    Loli breaks the silence:
         “Why did he do that? What did we do wrong? My whole body hurts, it’s 
         so unfair.” 
    They look at all the other girls, who are happily showering after the 
round robin tennis match. The girls look back with curiosity. Some are even 
jealous of the extra attention; Mae and Loli look at each other in disbelief.
         “Well at least Mr M is nice.” They both nod, and untie each other’s 
         laces.
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Please help.. while this is the worst example, it is not the only one.

=^_^=

ps: is there a better way to format a copied passage than using the CODE code and formatting eac h line manually?