Wow! Did "To Obey" have 1,000,000 chapters ... fuck me, I'm only up to writing chapter 114 right now. ;-)
"To Obey" was the first ever story I wrote. I'm not saying I did it right first time ... people don't realise how long writers really spend on their work: coming up with ideas, writing first draft, proofreading, re-reading, writing second draft, getting someone to proofread it, coming up with more ideas, re-writing the whole bloody chapter, proofreading, etc.
I can easily tell when I've made mistakes in my stories, usually when I read them on line about two weeks after they've been uploaded to the website. Embarrassing ... NOT!!!
Nadia you keep writing stories. I've received fan mail from people saying how amazing it would be to be a writer, it's not that hard but people either don't have the confidence, motivation, guts or even the interest to do it.
So please don't let a little thing like English not being your first language stand in your way. Advertise for a proof-reader ... there are many readers who are more than willing to proof-read your work before you give it to Jinn.
And if it's bad reviews that get you down ... check out my reviews. Some are fucking rude and bloody unfair ... (at least your reviews gave an answer as to why they rated it low) ... but not everyone will like what I write ... however, I secretly know that they are jealous as hell because they don't have the intelligence or the confidence to ever write a story in their lifetime, and post it on the website.
Your friend in the writers circle,
Fire-bird