Severusmax,

That was very well done. Congratulations on a delightful tale of seduction.

Checking out the big things – pacing, spelling, grammar, point of view/perspective, story layout and consistency of actions – you did a wonderful job with this assignment.

Do I believe it was written by a woman? Hmmmmmm….. Stacy thinks and speaks like a man when she’s telling a story. She’s got quite a mouth on her for a 25 year-old. However, when she’s speaking in dialog, arg, blah, blah, blah, too much information and yeah, I can see her just saying those things and not knowing when to be quiet.

We’ll have to let some of our other ladies in class give you their opinion.

Meanwhile, how’s the reading going?
Ready for your next writing assignment?

It’s a dialog practice.

Take Stacy and her husband, the topic is their fantasies.
Each must confess one fantasy and the other must react.
The goal is to make the dialog flow, make it believable and to take this couple to the next step in their relationship. Also, the fantasy must be in line with the characters as they are currently defined. Use "third person omniscient" to help us get inside both of their heads.

Good luck, you can do it!

Ruby