What did you think of the story title and blurb? Did it tell you enough to pique your interest and want to read more?
Niether reveals very much, but they certainly aren't bad. They did leave me struggling with what the plot could be -- something I'll touch on later.

The first few lines (paragraph) are vital to any story. Did this one "hook" you and make you want to keep reading?
The first two paragraphs were actually where I had the most trouble. First, the language thing, but that's meh and for a non-native speaker, not really that bad at all. However, this is where two things should happen: first, the characters should be introduced, but without names this is a bit hard, and most of it was anecdotal, not descriptive, of the characters; second, the plot or conflict should be introduced, but this sounds more like a conclusion: They live happily ever after, The End. I want to see struggle, turmoil, angst.

Did this story contain enough detail about the characters looked like, for all you perverts out there, or would you have like more?
Hard to say. I think the woman was described very well throughout, physically, but I don't go in for long descriptions; and there was almost no description of the man, but as this was from her perspective, and she hardly saw him, that actually had a good effect in my opinion, despite breaking convention.

Were you able to clearly visualise what the characters were doing and what was happening?
Yup.

The story contains no personal nouns. Did the use of "he" and "she" distance you from the characters, or did you feel it enhanced their sexuality?
I would have prefered names; they make a great opportunity for description to me. But I can understand why they weren't used. This is a solid Author's Discretion to me.

Did the author succeed in creating a strong feeling of dominance and submission?
Yes...physically, although not emotionally.

One reviewer says it let him/her "felting flat". Why do you think this may have been?
It's not emotional. Looking throughout, there's almost no sense of the characters themselves caring about anything going on, so it's hard for me to. I know this exists in the author's mind, from the bits and pieces there, but that emotion is as important as the action (probably more, for seriously D/s).

Finally, Tom's received good scores for this piece so far, but he's still chasing that illusive ten out of ten. So, if you could give him just one piece of advice, to improve his writing, what would it be?
PLOT. There is no conflict, no clash, nothing to make a reader care how it turns out. No reason to keep reading until the end -- if it didn't mention there were 4 more sections, I would never know because there's nothing left to resolve.

EMOTION. This could well be the plot -- struggling to adapt, to accept, to survive, whatever. Why is she doing this? Why does she like the parts she doesn't like (a key part of bdsm to me)? How does he really feel about her (this can be delivered 3rd person through voice tone, manners, comments, etc)?

You've got a good piece of prose, but you need to add these to make it more than a listing of sexy stuff.