Okie dokie, waiting on a call but can write until then...: (and this is my addiction, so if I comment too much just ignore me. Also, this is my take, you're the author, you do what you want and no worries from me)

First of all, this was an amazing work and was a real pleasure to read. I can't wait to hear more of it!!!

First P has a couple extraneous words - "and then" is pretty much never necessary, just erase one for a smoother transition (and then implies a distinct break or pause). "itself" can also go; actually while I LOVE the image of the second line, it seems very awkward and might be better broken into two or more line: something like "Outside, the master of gales roared. Churlish imps threw up whirls of leaves and water that danced in the wind, seeming to outline leering faces and pointed noses."

The initial meeting was great, and did a lot to characterize via actions: it gives a strong sense of the worrisome, energetic Anne and the composed, aloof Chrysalis without dwelling on adjectives.

But beginning with the slamming of the poker, the main character seemed to shift from Anne to Chrysalis. It might help to have the intro demonstrated from C's point of view if she's to be the protagonist: "She watched her sister with the door, delining to help."

"she was sat quietly" -- teehee!

-More later-