Quote Originally Posted by Moptop
And I'm sorry, Alex, but I disagree with just about every word you said! I won't go through it all in as much detail as you did (although I could...), but I think EB's style is quite poetic, and uses some quite advanced/literary language and turns of phrase, which would not necessarily be easy to follow for readers who are non-natural English language speakers, or anyone who is not used to reading that sort of language.
Well, Moptop, quite obviously I'm just not used to such "advanced/literary language and turns of phrase", as you, am I? I'm just your average reader, and if I found parts of the piece read oddly, or I wanted more description or whatever, then it's possible that others may also. I reiterate, " Please bear in mind that much of this is just my opinion. Others may read your piece quite differently."

Electric Badger asked for feedback (opinions)—I gave mine.

" Weren't" should be "wasn't", yes, you're right. Electric Badger, I apologise for my mistake.