
Originally Posted by
soledesire
Jaeangel:The correct spelling of 'coleric' is 'choleric'.
Oh, thank you. That was SO bothering me.
Jaeangel: "I am direct and frank because unfortunately I seem to have overestimated some part of this audience." 'part' indicates an individual/singular, and 'audience' implies a number of individuals. Therefore, in order to be grammatically correct, it shoud read, "...I seem to have overestimated some members of this audience."
Now see, what I got was "I am direct and frank because, unfortunately, I seem to have overestimated..." I didn't really catch the number agreement issue.
On paragraph 3, I am a big fan of using the semicolon for contrast, as in "Here, we can't be direct as among adults; here, we applaud everyone for everything they do..."
And for paragraph 4, I just wondered why the writer would think you were seeking his kudos. But then, I'm new here.
s/d (who may still be learning this sub thing but, by gosh, the girl can punctuate)