I would've liked to read more details... sounds she made... the way the ropes bit into her flesh..

I did like some of the details... the pile of clothes with mice... i loved how you started the story..

Who is tiffany, and what is her relation to the man? Is it his daughter he dresses up... a friend that likes to dress like a submissive... another slave of his...

Whenever I read detail like "took out his gold zippo lighter" it makes me think you took the time to say it was a gold zippo for a reason.. and then it wasnt used .. maybe it will be later?

Other than that, great start! Keep it up friend!
-Haelix