As you said Rhabbi, there were a few spelling errors, but as you have seen those now, I won't go over them. You have a good understanding of paragraphs, dialogue and the use of commas though, which meant that your story did not suffer because of these minor errors.

There are a few places where some minor changes would add in the flow of the story. In the following paragraph, you began each sentence with I, which distracted from the story somewhat.

I sat down next to you on the bed and admired the way your breasts looked as they were presented to me for my pleasure. I reached toward you with the knife in my hand and watched you freeze as I used the point to trace the outline of your aureole. I then careful laid the knife between your breasts and pulled off my gloves. I then stood and stripped off my clothes, tossing them at the foot of your bed. I saw your eyes taking in my 5’10”, 200# frame and wondering what would have happened if you had fought harder.

The following sentence needs a minor change "I let the knife trace its way back up your body and between your breasts, I finally let it stop at your throat. You either need to start the sentence with Finally or not use the second I.

Overall, you did a great job without the use of the spelling or grammar check. Thanks too for letting me know how you felt submitting the story without being able to check it as you normally would.

Your can begin work on the next assignment, where you can use the spelling and grammar check all you like! I will look forward to reading it.

Are you thinking of going on with the story maybe? I do hope so, as I would like to know what you have planned for your victim next!

Thanks
Aussiegirl