An impressive piece bokkey. With erotic writing I believe it is impossible to please everyone, since you cannot reflect all tastes. But the description, range of vocabulary and syntax makes that a story to please many.

Well done, and welcome to forums. I hope that now you have found us will linger, even when the main section is functional again. You may also wish to consider joining the writers' block which will help you to further refine your already impressive skills.

cariad