Very intense and sensual. My only quibble would be a 'here' for a 'hear' (right after private dancer)
The piece itself is marvelous, You set the mood and follow through. Your characters are real and they know each other well enough to carry off this 'Dance' with style and grace.
Great job.
Mad Lews
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Last edited by Mad Lews; 05-11-2007 at 03:58 PM.
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