Obnoxious Housemate 3 - Psychology

[Satan_Klaus]

Good comment, but not quite how I see it. I don't consider the limitations I place on my hero in this part to be ethical ones, or attempts at consensuality. He's not being ethical, he's being practical.

At least later, (chapter3) he seems to have serious moral issues.

I guess the situation could be defused by using less force in the beginning. He is probably a lot stronger than Lyn and could overpower her without beating her up.

Lynn isn't ugly. She's graceless, and with an unattractive mouth. You could actually say the same for many porn stars, and it doesn't seem to limit their success.

Excerpt Chapter1: "...as ugly as her face and soul were..."

Keep in mind that as the Author you can imagine your charaters much better than your readers. Not everything will come across as you intend it.

Looking back at this, I could have done it better -- I could have found some way to show he'd been plotting such a conquest for ages beforehand, but that would require Lynn to have had a habit of shower-pounding. And she didn't, it was a one-time thing. So without being flip, I really can't think of a good way to fix it.

Well he didn't have to plan everything meticulously. Just the firm intention to do something about the 'Lynn situation' is enough. He may have thought of blackmail as a good way to get at this Uberchristian bitch.

Maybe he even had doubts if he could carry it through but that angry moment in the bathroom made his descision.

P.S. I also liked the mindfuck aspect of making Lynn THINK she had a Jesus statuette up her ass.

I'd like to think that not all Jesus statuettes are unusable as sex toys. Of course the crown of thorns might hurt a little and once you get to the cross bar, things get REEEAAALY ugly.

Seriously, though when I read read your story I was thinking of one where he was depicted standing with his hands folded in front of him. Those might not be entirely sex toy certified but safe enough.

I just loved the imagery of shoving Jesus up her ass and somehow felt cheated...

Satan_Klaus

PS: On an blasphemous afterthought, Mother Mary could be quite suitable as a sex toy; the head of baby Jesus provides the little 'bump' that the ladies just love!

[Clevernick]

I guess the situation could be defused by using less force in the beginning. He is probably a lot stronger than Lyn and could overpower her without beating her up.

Funny I never considered that possibility. Possibly because it's not true in my memory. Lynn's a healthy girl who keeps in shape. S is a skinny guy who doesn't. The element of surprise would be needed, or he might well get his balls handed to him.

Excerpt Chapter1: "...as ugly as her face and soul were..."

Keep in mind that as the Author you can imagine your charaters much better than your readers. Not everything will come across as you intend it.

Good point! Keep in mind though not to take feelings and judgements literally. S is telling chapter 1 in present tense. To him, at that moment, she's the God Squad slobby intolerable tormenting housemate who is making him miserable. He will magnify her unattractive mouth into ugliness.

Later on when she's silent and compliant, he is less critical of her looks, and she's really not all that bad. Not "America's Next Model" material, but ok. And by chapter 3 he's no longer talking about putting a bag over her head.

Well he didn't have to plan everything meticulously. Just the firm intention to do something about the 'Lynn situation' is enough. He may have thought of blackmail as a good way to get at this Uberchristian bitch.

Maybe he even had doubts if he could carry it through but that angry moment in the bathroom made his descision.

Yes, that might well work.

I just loved the imagery of shoving Jesus up her ass and somehow felt cheated...

Well, with the way she's been getting used and stretched over the course of the story, she may end up using Jesus that way herself by the end! You may yet get your wish.