Thank you for the critique. I am such a goof ball with names. I wrote the story in two parts and the first draft had me switching Aaron's name with Eric's after a few paragraphs.

It did take a while for me to think of a good story with all the prompts you gave me. I wanted the switch to be seamless, like a camera fallowing the 2 marchers from the machine to the door then back to the machine. If I had introduced the element earlier it might have worked better.

The dictionary has been helping with looking up words I'm unsure of but it seems I could probably benefit from just using the spell check to show me misspelled words.

It's kind of funny about the dialogue between the band guys. I had given that phrase some thought after I first wrote it and thought about adding emphasis on the word 'not' so it would be clearer he was trying to make a point to his friend but I left it because I wanted to move on to Kelly and Eric.

Thank you again for your help. I'm pretty sure you don't hate me, despite all evidence to the contrary, but where did you get the idea for that kind of music box?