TG:

The clash between detail and just fast action is always a challenge, especially for short stories. While the action is the focus, without sufficient detail it becomes harder for the reader to suspend his/her disbelief. Personally, I enjoy good detail as long as it is truely relevent to the story. It enriches the stage of the theater of the mind. Check the next 2 chapters on the stories pages, then let me know what you think.

Thanks for your input!