Praise, Comments, or Suggestions for the New Lord Mobius's Dungeon

[Ruby]

Hi Everyone

Here is the link for the dungeon bio page
http://www.vampirespet.com/FAQMDCB.html

If you sent me a bio and it isn't on the page, please PM me and let me know.

If I've changed some vital bit of info, misspelled a word or two, just tell me and I'll do my best to correct it ASAP.

A few of you suggested we have a page for each character, but an alternative might be to have a list at the top of the page and links within the page for fast access.

At this stage of the game, I'm coded out. So if someone wants to step up to the plate and pretty this page, please copy the source and go for it.

Posting the pages is easy for me...coding them is not.

I'll be cruising with Captain Chuck soon on another fantasy voyage. I missed the first one but am looking forward to this trip. Jade, Jaden, Sari and I are signed up. Who else is coming?

Perhaps a lurker who's always wanted to play with us...

[Darkgirl]

Hi Everyone

Here is the link for the dungeon bio page
http://www.vampirespet.com/FAQMDCB.html

If you sent me a bio and it isn't on the page, please PM me and let me know.

If I've changed some vital bit of info, misspelled a word or two, just tell me and I'll do my best to correct it ASAP.

A few of you suggested we have a page for each character, but an alternative might be to have a list at the top of the page and links within the page for fast access.

At this stage of the game, I'm coded out. So if someone wants to step up to the plate and pretty this page, please copy the source and go for it.

Posting the pages is easy for me...coding them is not.

I'll be cruising with Captain Chuck soon on another fantasy voyage. I missed the first one but am looking forward to this trip. Jade, Jaden, Sari and I are signed up. Who else is coming?

Perhaps a lurker who's always wanted to play with us...

Just read the dungeon bio page. My character is perfect. Just like to say thanks very much. Wil I be able to add more to as the character grows?
:woman:

[Ruby]

Just read the dungeon bio page. My character is perfect. Just like to say thanks very much. Wil I be able to add more to as the character grows?
:woman:

Thanks. Yes, you may add more at any time. Bios and updates can be sent to me my e-mail, PM or posted in this thread.

There may be a delay depending on whether or not I have access to a computer. I'll be doing lots of travel in April, but normally, I can have the new stuff up within a week.

[Mobius]

outstanding Rube's, Very well done

It would be nice if Jinn could set that up as a link but alas nothing has been done.

Perhaps I will just put it down as a link on the bottom of my information
Good job Ruby

[chromedome11]

If I've changed some vital bit of info, misspelled a word or two, just tell me and I'll do my best to correct it ASAP.

Great job Ruby. I know it's impossible to edit something you've read several times. Here's the advantage of fresh eyes:

Lord Sir Chuck, last paragraph: "mental powers from a sharing more than a kiss". First "a" should be deleted.

Darkgirl, last paragraph: "tame her is to brake her". Should be "break".

Jade, history: "Her husband beat and rapes". Should be "raped".
Jade, history: "There divorce occurs when he runs". Should be "Their divorce occurs after..."
Jade, history: "wandering for 3 years trying to figured out". Should be "figure out".
Jade, legend: "they tortured and killed her fours sons". Should be "four".

Jaden, history: The last paragraph is a repeat and can be deleted.

"Mary (Teni aka truckinnhors)" should be "truckinnhorsin"

Myra: "left at the alter". Should be "altar".
Myra: "Mildar has dealt with her one more". Should be "on".

Perhaps a lurker who's always wanted to play with us...

Your invitation is very tempting. Maybe next time when I have more time available.

[Microwave0ven]

curious about this:

Dracubius - "Evil, Sadistic, Julius, frankly mean..." what's "julius"? is it supposed to be 'jealous'? Also, the capitalization here could be changed (ie. Sadistic -> sadistic)


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Mildar
"Anaged supernatural" should be "An aged supernatural"
"potions some times with" should be "potions sometimes with"
"If you come to his door be prepared to answer 3 questions." insert comma after "door"
"If you get them right he will reward you. If you get them wrong he will punish you." insert comma after "right" and "wrong"

[Ruby]

Thanks everyone for the great comments and corrections.

Warning - I've also heard that there are some funky characters showing depending on the browser you are using.

This is a cry for help to Super MO/Jaden - If you have time, may you please copy the source code and make these corrections. If you don't have the time, just let me know and I'll put it back on my to do list.

Everyone else - keep those edits and suggestions coming. I won't be able to get to them for a few days and a more eyeballs won't hurt.

[Ruby]

Pretty Golden Slave Sari - great posts today - it's nice to have you back.

Jade - I just love how you keep these stories going.

Jaden - Cool dream - so real. A sweet interlude and reality check to the workings of the mind after a harsh session with two mistresses and a master. Poor baby thought you were going to get a nice fun spanking instead of a hard lesson. Behave yourself and I'll be happy to give you a fun spanking on our cruise.

Lord Mobius - I'll be missing you as I sail off with Captain Chuck. Thanks for the kind words on the bio FAQ.

BabySub - Have fun with Yuri. I'd say don't do anything I wouldn't do, but we both know virtual Ruby is a slut and there's not much she wouldn't do with the big guy.

[BabySub]

BabySub - Have fun with Yuri. I'd say don't do anything I wouldn't do, but we both know virtual Ruby is a slut and there's not much she wouldn't do with the big guy.

LMFAO! Very true. I do intend to have fun. Lots of it. I've posted the beginning, but don't have time or the strength to do anything more with it tonight. I'll certainly have some sweet dreams though.

The bios page is looking awesome btw, and I will, at some time this year, get a bio done for BabySub. Maybe. lol.

[Ruby]

B - another amazing journey into your fantasies. Excellent story posts today, without giving away the plot - let's just way I'd be happy to have Yuri take me where he's going to take you, anytime. :-)

[Microwave0ven]

Warning - I've also heard that there are some funky characters showing depending on the browser you are using.

This is a cry for help to Super MO/Jaden - If you have time, may you please copy the source code and make these corrections. If you don't have the time, just let me know and I'll put it back on my to do list.

Yep, with Mozilla Firefox i get some odd characters..and yep, i can fix the page for you

edit: fixed and emailed off to you, will update further fixes as they get discovered and "reported"

Do we really need a Spell Nazi in the dungeon.

This is suppose to be a free and easy writing exorcise. It is suppose to be fun. enough of the critiques K

yessir, not tryin to criticize you in particular, just correcting what chromedome11 missed and also, when i think "julius" i think of that Orange Julius food chain..

[Ruby]

Thanks Jaden for taking the time to fix! Big hugs and extra kisses and cuddles when you wake from your virtual dream.

Everyone - the new page is up:

http://www.vampirespet.com/FAQMDCB.html

[Myya]

Hey, just checking in real fast. love what's happening in the dungeon . not much time to really sit down and write lately though.

If my mistress deems me worthy enough please feel free to take me along with you on the cruise I'll try to make some time to stop by and write a bit.

*waves as she runs off*

[Mobius]

curious about this:

Dracubius - "Evil, Sadistic, Julius, frankly mean..." what's "julius"? is it supposed to be 'jealous'? Also, the capitalization here could be changed (ie. Sadistic -> sadistic)


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Mildar
"Anaged supernatural" should be "An aged supernatural"
"potions some times with" should be "potions sometimes with"
"If you come to his door be prepared to answer 3 questions." insert comma after "door"
"If you get them right he will reward you. If you get them wrong he will punish you." insert comma after "right" and "wrong"

Do we really need a Spell Nazi in the dungeon.

This is suppose to be a free and easy writing exorcise. It is suppose to be fun.
enough of the critiques K