Quote Originally Posted by RiverOtter View Post
This is actually a third draft, but the second version I've posted.

The setting: The Roman Empire...in the future!! [*dum-dum-dummm* music]

I'd like to know: Does the setting work (i.e., is it interesting) and are the characters consistent.

Thanks in advance for useful/sincere feedabck.

Nice start RiverOtter; the beginnings of a SCIFi epic no doubt. I did a little color correcting in word doc which I could e-mail as an attachment if you like but it's mostly misplaced words and pronoun stuff, the story flow itself is great.
Mad Lews