This is a good story, Austerus, but I think you need to revise it and cull those extra odd words. E.g. "He lifted his hand to the knob and paused. Jennifer was a friend after all, did he want to...his hand turned the doorknob, pushing open the door and following it into the apartment. " Is kind of jarring and would possbily read better and sharper as: "He lifted his hand and paused. Jennifer was a friend after all, did he want to...he turned the knob, pushed the door open and entered the apartment.