I need advice RE:Formatting conversations.

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Attached is your passage in an edited form:

Apparently, the VBB text boxes don't like formatted paragraphs and such very much. Although, I have used them before in some of my writing without any difficulty. It might be the software used for the word formatting.

Here are a couple of links, too, to help you with your dialogue and your use of colons and semi-colons:

Dialogue rules: http://www.stlcc.cc.mo.us/mc/support..._Dialogue.html

Colon and semi-colon rules: http://web2.uvcs.uvic.ca/elc/studyzo...mar/colons.htm

I hope this helps.