Quote Originally Posted by Mad Lews
Here's an intro that isn't terribly erotic yet but if all goes well will someday see the light of day as a sweet romantic love story
I thought you were apprehensive of being moved to Romance department?

Well it looks more like a setting for a bloody tsunami. It certainly should get better when it gets to individual characters - it's always better when you do it to Someone, not to a bunch of guards.

Now this Lien Venrihet (the fifth!) he isn't ancestor of Machaveli, is he?

I always though that "now look what have you done!" is one of the best lines ever!

Ok. Here's nice albeit 'slippery when wet' stage. Now what?