Robert,

I loved the story: what a great seduction! And I believed in both John and Amy most of the time too.

As for the tenses, quirky, but they didn't distract me as much as the bloody capitals did.

Now, I'm only a beginner, but I found your story had ideas and a style that I just might try to imitate some time down the line, time shifts and all ... so watch out, Dragon's Muse!

TYWD