The mad one is right, telling a story like one of your characters would is a powerful tool that is well worth learning. It's very difficult, though, because of its subtlety. Which character would use which words and avoid which others? How about the tone and feel and interpretation of events? Very tricky indeed.
But the reviews we got are really not enough to truly judge how hope would go about things. There has to be a 'Razor' part (or at least a "Razor's character, Hope" part in there just to fill the gaps.
Satan_Klaus
PS: Lews, this telling a story like your character would is, of course, of paramount concern to me because of the 'litany of fire' where two narrators share the tale. I was always wondering how I could improve on this.