I agree with all of your notes, and sorry for the obvious typos. I'm working on other things right now, but I really should do some editing for my Level Three assignments and put them on the library. My first assignment was just posted there, as was an original piece (What She Always Wanted) and another part of the "The Casebook of the Captive Teen Detective".

This one and Queen Epithymia could both potentially be updated and posted, though both probably require more work than they are worth; I'd be better off applying the lessons to a new story, I think.