I had a look, but couldn't get into it. I found it didn't 'flow' for me, the lines seemed to kind of 'stick', the words didn't seem quite right.

I think with an edit it would be a good story, but I couldn't read past the first couple of pages.

Of course I'm a bit jaded with stories & pics these days, both have to really grab me to get much of a look.

I've also been helping one of my girls out on a book she's writing- she writes & I look for holes.
Her writing just blows me away, for someone so young she's incredible.

Just my opinion, I'm no writer...

Tojo