You do appear bored with this story. I can see numerous moments that seemed a struggle where you had not struggled so much before.

The soaring arches and columns of the resort dwarfed everyone but them. They weren’t just larger than life. Under the artificial lighting, the three women and one man almost glowed. Perhaps it was their beauty or radiant health but they stood out from the milling crowd of tourists.

Darlin', I'm not gonna hammer all over this piece. It really does seem to have run out of steam and I can tell with sentences that go nowhere - like the one in red. I've read you be far more expressive than this. Maybe it is the assignment wearing thin or maybe it was your struggle with the concept Mad gave you. It wasn't an easy concept and I would have struggled greatly. Either way, I think I am looking forward to what Mad has assigned for you next.

By the way, it seems that I have been given the task of taking over this level. I do hope you will stick around and help out with this level when you have slipped past its murky depths. Someone has to be nice, after all. Moreover, I have very much appreciated reading your assignments and, I do believe, helping others with their tasks is an excellent way to improve one's own writings.

By the way - if you want me to go ahead and rip this piece, I will. I don't want you to think that it was for nothing that you wrote this, but it is rather clear you are swimming against your own current and would like to move on.

Dean the Mean